Enterprise Fortnight – Abi S’ persuasive letter to Mr Burford

Thursday 28^th November 2013

 

Dear Mr Burford,

I am writing to you to tell you about my fabulous idea for Enterprise Fortnight. I/ my group Christmas Pandas think we should sell pepper cookies (don’t worry they don’t blow your mouth off) and a gluten free range for those who are not allowed to eat gluten.

I know you are an intelligent man, so you will say ‘yes’ to our idea. It will make a lot of money because we will attract people like you with our fancy designs and quality products. Once you have had one you will be wanting more and more and more they are scrumdiddlyumpshious.

We will also have our own gluten free range, for people who can’t eat gluten. We have expertise help from Miya G as she is in our group. So we can use her expertise on making gluten free cakes/ cookies.

If you don’t come to our stall, you will miss out on our wonderful pepper cookies and our gluten free range of food. Only fools say ‘no’ to our products and you are not a fool!

Yours sincerely

Abigail S

Enterprise Fortnight – Ben’s persuasive letter to Mr Burford

Thursday 28^th November

Dear Mr Burford,

I am writing to you to tell you that you have a great opportunity to buy our amazing cheese straws. We have a great recipe that will impress you a lot and once you start eating them you won’t stop.

The cheese straws will not exactly be cheese straws but they will be cheese shapes. We know you like savoury biscuits which is why we chose cheese shapes. The cheese shapes will probably be Christmas related shapes like: Christmas trees, bells and stars.

Clearly, you are a very clever man who makes sensible choices and if you choose our cheese shapes then you are making the right choice. Only a fool will say no to this suggestion and you are not a fool.

I hope you choose our cheese shapes because if you don’t you will be missing out on the best idea ever. Do you really want the school to have more money? Do you want the solar panels for the school? Well choose our idea!

We will also be doing a gluten free range for people with food allergies. We will be selling them for £2.00 the same price as the normal cheese shapes. Furthermore we will be doing them in packs of ten so they can just take the pack, give us the money and not take forever to choose a cheese shape.

 

Yours sincerely,

 

Ben FL

(Bananas in Pyjamas)

Persuasive letters related to The School We’d Like – Imogen D

Tuesday 10^th September

Dear Mr Buford,

I am writing to you to see if you will adopt our idea. Our idea is a vegetable patch out side each of the classes. You are always saying how important team work is; a vegetable patch would be a perfect. Below I have outlined the reasons; only a fool wouldn’t hop aboard this wonderful idea.

Firstly I think this is a fantastic idea; if children don’t have a garden at home they can come in every morning and tend some vegetables.                obviously you cant have 28 children all crowding around one vegetable patch at once, so we would have to organise teams that is were team work comes in.

Scientific research shows that gardening is meant to be relaxing and we would raise money for the school. ‘How?’ I hear you ask. well we would sell the fruit and vegetables that we grow (keep some to each for ourselves as well) and hopefully we would make a good profit, that would create a stronger connection with the community.

So Mr Buford do you want a fit and healthy pupils?  Do you want a stronger connection with the community? I hope you are as wise as you are normally are and agree to this.

Yours sincerely

Immy D

Persuasive letters relating to The School We’d Like – Peter

Dear Mr Burford,

I am writing to you to tell you why my group want a chicken coup. Hopefully you will agree because we think this is a fantastic idea.

We think the chicken coup is a great idea because then you can sell the chickens eggs to raise money for the school. Also, chickens are a great idea because you can pick them up. Furthermore, we could have great fun with them. My group think we should get bantams then you get to pick them up more. Also when they run it looks so cute. Additionally, my group thinks we should have 9 chickens so then KR, AS, MG, KB, DC, LL, JA, SH and most importantly HG could get a chicken. Every class should have 1 chicken per class.

Hopefully no-one is allergic to chickens because if not that would be great. Chickens are happy and playful because they are funny when they walk and run.

 

Yours sincerely

 

Louisa

Persuasive letters related to The School We’d Like – Louisa

Dear Mr Burford,

I am writing to you to tell you why my group want a chicken coup. Hopefully you will agree because we think this is a fantastic idea.

We think the chicken coup is a great idea because then you can sell the chickens eggs to raise money for the school. Also, chickens are a great idea because you can pick them up. Furthermore, we could have great fun with them. My group think we should get bantams then you get to pick them up more. Also when they run it looks so cute. Additionally, my group thinks we should have 9 chickens so then KR, AS, MG, KB, DC, LL, JA, SH and most importantly HG could get a chicken. Every class should have 1 chicken per class.

Hopefully no-one is allergic to chickens because if not that would be great. Chickens are happy and playful because they are funny when they walk and run.

 

Yours sincerely

 

Louisa

Persuasive letters related to The School We’d Like – Brooke

Monday 9^th September

Dear Mr Burford,

I am writing to you to tell you about Bob the Blobfish’s idea to improve the school. You have done so well at making the school not just look good, but be good too. We have thought very hard about this and we have found a way to make the school a………… computer room! Just think about it; we know how much you know about computers and we think you will like the idea.

Firstly, the strengths are you and the other teachers won’t have to walk up and down the corridor when someone needs help. Children will get more work done because it will be quieter for them. Fortunately teachers can talk and the children will be able to hear them. As you can see this is a great idea that will benefit everyone. Only a fool would pass away an opportunity like this.

You may think that there are no other strengths but there are. Children on the computers will get more work done. Unfortunately, it will be easier to talk to friends, but the teachers will see you and tell you off. Teachers won’t have to go out of their class and tell the people on the computers to keep the noise down. It would be great. The best part is teachers will be in complete control.

Before I go I would like to ask you some questions. Do you want the children to be above average in all subjects? Do you want to have some peace in your office? Think about it! I think I know what your answer will be to all these questions but I might be wrong. Anyway, it’s your choice and I know you will pick what is best for the school. So think long and hard about this and I hope you chose what we think is best.

Yours sincerely

Brooke L

Persuasive letters related to The School We’d Like – Briony

Dear Mr Burford,

I am writing to you to tell you about my idea of the computer room because it will benefit the children and the teachers a lot.

 

The teachers won’t have to walk down the corridor which means the children won’t have to wait too long with their hand up.

 

Additionally, children will be able to hear what the teacher is saying and the teacher will be able to tell if we are talking which is good for our education; it will be quiet.

Breakfast club and film club can move to the hall. Wii fit can stay and chess club can move to the conference room. It will be quieter there for chess

 

The computer room I think is a good idea.

 

Yours sincerely

 

Briony

Persuasive letters relating to The school we’d Like – James K

 

Monday 9^th September 2013

Dear Mr Burford,

I am writing to you to tell you about our idea of having 9 chickens. I doubt that you will not like it as you have some of your own Therefore you know how beneficial they are.

Firstly we get eggs from them and we can do lots of things with them such as:

Selling them to get money.

The eggs are also for the teachers’ breakfast.

 

You may be concerned about safety issues, However you have no need to worry because we have Mrs Brown and Mrs Boyle who are trained first aiders. Not just that but we are getting a type of chicken called bantams ` and they are very calm so they do not peck. Also they have fluffy feet so you can pick them up without risk of injury.

Here are some questions for you to consider.  Do you want money more for the school? Do you want your children to learn more about chickens? Do you want plenty of eggs? Only a fool would say no to these questions and you are not a fool.

Yours sincerely,

James K

Persuasive letters relating to The School We’d Like – Daisy

                                                                                        Monday 9^th September

Dear Mr Burford,

I am writing to outline my group’s idea of a computer room in the middle classroom.

I think that a computer room is quite a good idea as the children can get more support from teachers as they will be in the same room instead of walking up and down. I (and I am sure many others feel the same way) find it annoying when I am stuck and have to go and find a teacher or having to put my hand up until they walk by.

We were thinking about placing a couple of tables in the middle of the room. Therefore the mini laptops can be put there and maybe breakfast club could still carry on if there is enough space. It will be easier to talk to friends but this will not be the case as teachers will spot this easily. The worst problems that we thought of were Wii fit, Breakfast club and Chess club. If they couldn’t find another place they wouldn’t be able to carry on. Breakfast club can still carry on (if not they can move into the hall), but Chess club will have to move somewhere like the Conference room. Wii fit will still be able to carry on if we don’t put the computers in front of the whiteboard or projector screen.

To conclude, I think this idea will benefit all the teachers, children, and other people like the governors and parents. Children won’t be as naughty in I.C.T lessons as teachers will see them talking. I also hope that you will take the idea into mind, as only a fool would turn down this amazing idea. I hope you like my letter and idea as much as I do.

Yours sincerely,

 

Daisy M

Persuasive letters related to The School We’d Like – Imogen W

Tuesday 10^th September

 

Dear Mr Burford,

I am writing to inform you about my idea to have 15 bee hives. It is an excellent idea and it would benefit the whole school. You would be a fool not to take this once in a life time opportunity. Here is an outline of my reasons.

My group, KFC, chose this idea because keeping bees increases the population for bees. Also having bees benefit the whole school because children can sell the honey and help build the hives from the kits. It would be great to sell the honey because our school could make quite a big profit out of it. The profit we would make would help improve the school. Also having bees will help keep away the foxes.

Secondly, I know how much health and safety means to you, having bee hives might be a problem for being stung. If our idea came true we would fence the area off and place the hives behind the growing area. Therefore we have insured that no one in the school are allergic to bee stings. We found this information out from the office. Having bees is good for the environment because they would pollinate our school flowers on the field. Therefore the field would look scenic because we would have a vibrant field.

Here are some questions for you to answer. Do you want Liss pupils to be filled with information about bees? Do you want your school field looking stunning? I know that you are a great and clever teacher and wouldn’t want to miss out on this great opportunity. Only a fool wouldn’t take this chance.

Yours sincerely

Imogen W