Daisy’s Victorian Diary

While Year 6 and half of Year 5 have been on residential, the remaining children have been writing diary entries for a servant who worked at Blenheim Palace in the 19th century. The children were encouraged to use a range of sentence starters and descriptive devices as well as sharing emotive detail. Her’s Daisy’s entry:

Tuesday 24th June 1884

Dear Diary,

Today has been absolutely awful! I hate this place, I really  do. I wish wish wish wish I was back home with Mama and Papa, and baby Rose, but even though I am only 12 I have to work because I need the money, and this is my only opportunity. It is a harsh place. I have to wake up at six sharp every morning, and if I over sleep I get a good tug of the ear and a slap around the face.

Let me tell you about this infernal day. Firstly, I had to empty the disgusting chamber pots. It’s really Brooke’s job, but at the moment she has a bad case of influenza. I do feel sorry for her, of course, but I can’t help but wish that she was here. After I had emptied them all into the slop bucket ( eleven as Master and Mistress have guests staying) I had to polish Master’s shoes and light the huge coal fire in the drawing room.

With coal smeared across my cheek and polish on my new white apron, I scurried out of the palace to pick some herbs for Cook. The huge eyes leered at me from the ceiling. As intimidated as a little robin in the hands of a tabby, I flew (not literally) down the concrete stairs, grabbed a handful of mint and dashed back inside. Those eyes are so scary; Mistress must be mad. They follow me through the great hall, and still haunt me in the kitchen. I hate this job.

“There now,” Cook said gently. “That stag been following you again? No need to look so frightened, you’ll get used to it eventually.”

“No Cook,” I reply. “It was the eyes this time!”

Shaking her head, Cook told me to ignore them. I would, but how can I? They are huge! I think I will faint next time I see them.

Mary Mac was  waiting for me when I came out. She’s the Duchess’s eldest daughter, about 4 and 10.

“Good morning, miss,” I said, performing a delicate curtsey, then clamped my hand over my mouth. “I’m terribly sorry, I know I must only speak when spoken to, Mary Mac, I mean miss….” I was now horribly flustered.

“Calm down,” reassured Mary Mac. “I won’t tell mother. Come along, now!”

Dazed, I followed her into the great hall. It certainly is great. Giant! Next to the stag’s corridor, it takes ages to get to. Grudgingly, I polished the dusty skirting boards, and by the time I was finished it was lunch: A meagre slice of bread with a bruised apple. As it is Maisy’s birthday today, Cook made her a lovely creamy cake.

“Here, Elsie,” she whispered, slipping a slice into my pinafore pocket. “For being a good, helpful girl!”

Elated, I smiled at her, but then I suddenly spotted the Duchess looking towards us. For one terrifying moment I thought she had seen Cook’s sneaky move, but is was much worse than that.

“Come with me, Elsie Lockwood,” she said stiffly. Before I had a chance to respond, she grabbed me hard by the arm. “ I require your service.”

Breathing heavily, she tip-tapped down the stag’s corridor in her stupid pink shoes. The big stag’s head right in the middle followed me all the way down, but for once I didn’t really care. She stopped me to pick up some linen to iron, then we carried on. I was still wondering where on earth she was taking me. Abruptly, she let go of my short arm. We were now outside the scullery, just next to the kitchens.

“This will be your new room,” she announced. “Pollyana will be taking your old one.”

“But… but…. I don’t want to be a parlour maid!” I protested.

Impatiently, my mistress let out an agitated sigh.

“You will still be a maid of general work, Elsie, what is it that you don’t understand? Polyana is much more well behaved than you, and you know that the good ones receive the privileges!”

With that, she dumped my few but precious possessions into my arms, and then she tapped back down the floor, fixing her luxuriant raven-black hair into an elegant chignon as she went.

“Windows!” she called over her shoulder. Grumbling, I emptied the linen onto the floor and then trudged away to find some cleaning rags. By the time I had cleaned all 129 windows, my poor hands were neon red and my nails were scrubbed so much that some of them were bleeding. By this time I was INCANDESCENT WITH RAGE!

Exhausted, I collapsed into my itchy bed at half past ten (I am never in bed before that time). Finally, all my duties had been done! Time to get some well-earned sleep…. Suddenly, an ear-piercing scream shattered the silent air like a rusty wrench.

“Sorry, Pollyana!” I cried, and fled out of the room, across about a hundred corridors, until finally I reached the scullery. It is even worse that my other room in the servant’s quarters, as I have to share it! I share it with Hetty, she’s quite nice, who snores like a pig. Anyway, I must go. My candle is burning out. I am as tired as though I have run a marathon, so goodbye, dear diary. I will eat my cake tomorrow, even though it is slight.

By Daisy MacDonald

Informal Language to Formal Language

In Literacy this week we have been looking at formal letters. We carried out an exercise where we wrote a scenario of a man  in court who recounts his version of events in highly colloquial terms and then his barrister translates this into formal language. The children really enjoyed doing this. Here are some examples from Daisy, Abi and Andrew.

Andrew

Yo man. I wuz hangin’ out at the drinkin’ place when the old guy there doesn’t accept me dosh. ‘E said I needed more and turned away. I did the same and as I reached the door the window smashed in to a fousand pieces. The guy came over and was like well angry and fainted. ‘E fought I ‘ad hit ‘im but I hadn’t. Next fing I knew the rozzers were all around ‘oldin’ pistols out and arrested me, yeah?

 

Your honour, although my client is here in court, he isn’t the slightest bit guilty. My client informs me that he was seeking accommodation at a local restaurant. However, the gentleman at the counter did not accept his large amount of money. My client then travelled to the toilets and when he came out the gentleman had gone. He turned for the door when a gentleman outside broke the door and decided to blame the whole thing on my client. Next, the local constabulary made their presence clear and arrested him for something that he hadn’t committed to do. I do not believe that, even though he was arrested, he is guilty.

Abi S

Yo man I woz hangin with my broz at the like disco. I woz goin to my crib like so yeah man but on the way to my crib like I woz feelin so blurrgh I tripped and fell through some glass like and then I woz so dizzy and ill I like had no idea what happened next man and suddenly like I woz getting arrested man!

Your honour my client was trying to tell you that he was at the dance with bright lights. Then he felt so ill after too much dancing. He decided to go home, but on the way to his house he was violently sick. He tripped through a glass window. Furthermore, as he was so dizzy with illness he broke into a till, not knowing what he was doing (obviously!) He took some money from the till and then the police arrived and he was arrested for being ill! How unlucky was that!

Daisy

I was chillin’ out in Hawaii, yea, on ‘oliday. This geezer grabbed my arm, yea, so I like nicked this old pile of bones’ walking stick and clocked him one his ugly mug. I yelled “Why did ya grab me, you donut?” and then the rozzers came, and I was like “Crikey, it’s the Hawaiian rozzers!” and they chucked me in the slammer, yea man.

Your honour. My client informs me that he was having a relaxing break from his busy life in London in Hawaii. A men then came along and took hold of his arm. He was very startled, which therefore caused him to cry out. This sudden noise startled the man, which made him fall over and hurt himself. Then a member of the local constabulary wrongly accused him of striking the member of public, and he was promptly arrested, although he had done nothing wrong.

Ancient Greek News Articles

The Ancient Greeks have been the topic we have followed throughout the term and this week we have been writing newspaper reports, many of them based upon myths. When all the reports are completed we will use them to create a class newspaper. Here are the first three reports from Andrew N, Dylan, Daisy, Toby, Oscar and Peter for you to enjoy.

Andrew N & Dylan

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Daisy & Toby

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Peter & Oscar

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My Autobiography: Daisy

I can write my autobiography

 “It looks awful!” I cried, covering my face in embarrassment as a huge picture of me spread across the TV screen.

“You should be pleased! I mean, how many people we know round here have won? None!” answered my Mum.

I entered ‘Share a Story’ when I was seven and won it shortly after my eighth birthday. Now my story was animated, and on the TV, and I was really happy…

On the 2nd of June 2004 at 4:44am I entered the world. I was born at St Mary’s hospital in Portsmouth, weighing 8 pounds and 7oz. I am not sure if I cried, but my little brother Angus definitely did. I remember my Dad driving me to the hospital to see my new baby brother. When we came back I fell fast asleep. Now I have 2 brothers (worst luck). One is a pain and one is very naughty!

My first memory was my first holiday to Suffolk. We were staying at a house owned by some people called Peter and Sue. I can’t remember who they were but their house was very small. I don’t know how old I was but I don’t think I’d started school yet. My first brother was born, though, because I remember him clamouring to go inside the house that ‘Grandpa in my pocket’ was filmed. The holiday was quite good and I enjoyed it.

My best moments were when I went to Granada studios to get my story animated, when I met Luke Rowe, when I met Jacqueline Wilson and when I met some athletes. Granada studios were very big! They were also very fun. I got to go there because I entered ‘Share a Story’ and won with my story ‘The Possessed Pants’. I also felt proud when I went there because only eight people out of 5,500 people got to go. I met Jacqueline Wilson somewhere at a book singing in Winchester. I got my book ‘Four Children and It’ signed. I remember telling her about my story that was on the TV and she said that I might be a writer one day! It was the best thing that anyone had ever said to me. Luke Rowe is a cyclist who cycled in the ‘Tour of Britain’ 2012. I met him and he talked to me, and I also got his signature and a picture taken with him! I was really happy to meet him. The athletes I met were Leonard Komen, Jo Pavey and lots of others. All these events were very memorable and enjoyable.

I have always enjoyed reading and writing since I was quite small. When I grow up I would like to be an author because I really enjoy writing as you can let your imagination flow free.

I hope you enjoyed finding out about me in my autobiography. I wonder what will happen to me next?…

Desert Disaster – Daisy

Last week the children hotseated characters for a story opening. This week they have been writing, editing and refining their story openings. Here’s Daisy’s desert disaster:

The desert disaster
It was a stifling hot June afternoon and the passengers who were on board the flight to Mexico felt like they were inside a radiator. The seats were so full you couldn’t see a dab of dingy cream and grey. Some children chattered excitedly to each other as they fanned themselves with their fingers, while others sat sweltering (but uncomplaining) reading their books. Unfortunately, Brianna Jenkins’s children weren’t doing either.
“Sit down, Demetra! And you, Briony. You’re getting on my nerves!” Brianna cried, struggling to talk to her new friend, Maria, without getting distracted. Giggling, the children collapsed at Brianna’s bright suede high heels, their long hair getting tangled under the seat. After a minute or two they calmed down.

“Finally!” exclaimed Brianna, shaking her head. “Anyway, I’m going to visit my Mother and my little sister, Rose. I haven’t seen them since my birthday, and that was in December! Why are you going to Mexi….oh, I must tell you, she lives in the capital city there. What’s it called again? Oh, it doesn’t matter, because you must know…WHAT’S HAPPENING?!?!?” Brianna’s rosy face turned white with terror. The plane was jolting back and forth! Brianna’s ebony and sapphire bracelet slipped off her wrist. As scared as a rabbit in some headlights, she rushed to retrieve it.

“Don’t get out of your seats!” a middle aged business woman screamed. She was wearing a short jet black skirt and a navy jacket. Slowly, her tawny bun unravelled as she ran over to Brianna, who was now reaching out for her bracelet… C-REAK! Crying, Bobby (Brianna’s baby) woke up. The plane was tipping! Screaming, Brianna and Stephanie the businesswoman started to slide down the plane… Everything went black.
Opening her eyes, Brianna realised where they had crashed. They were in a desert, and all Brianna could see was sand for miles around. How were they going to get out?

Brianna Jenkins (39), a traveller.
Brianna Jenkins (39), a traveller.

Macbeth: Recounts from the meeting with the witches – Daisy

In literacy this week we have been looking at the first meeting between Macbeth, Banquo and the three witches. Our task was to write a recount from either the point of view of Macbeth or Banquo. To prepare for this we had a carousel of activities where we watched part of the animation, put our hands in a feelie box to imagine what Banquo and Macbeth could feel and smell on the heath, listened to thunder, hotseated Macbeth himself and looked at the graphic novel of Macbeth.

 

We were looking for our writing to include a range of descriptive devices and to use a variety of sentence lengths, especially short sentences that would build up tension. The children might also use some archaic language.

 

Daisy’s writing was a fantastic example of descriptive writing and it’s ready for you to read below:

A recount of Macbeth’s meeting with the witches from Banqou’s point of view

Macbeth and I marched happily across the battlefield, me beating my drum in victory. Evening mist wrapped itself around us and the darkening sky sprouted its first twinkling star. The only sound I could hear was the rustling of bushes and the snapping of stray tree branches under our feet. I could smell wet grass and a faint whiff of blood from our swords.

Suddenly I jumped. I had heard something. A cackling sound. I looked around, turning this way and that. Then I saw where the noise had come from. Three women came into view, as if from nowhere. Their hair was like straw and their faces were as white as ghosts. They were the ugliest creatures I’d ever seen. Glowing eerily, their eyes turned to face us.

“Hail!” they cried in unison. “All hail Macbeth, Thane of Glamis!” Next, the biggest witch screeched,

“All hail Macbeth, Thane of Cawdor, who shalt be king thereafter!”

As scared as a statue, I took a small step backwards. I was shocked out of my skin. Macbeth, king? I couldn’t believe it.

“Who are you, you foul creatures?” I asked, trembling.

“We are three sisters, come to tell your future!” they replied.

“Is what you speak of true?” breathed Macbeth, amazed. I spoke before they could answer.

“Speak now to me!” I cried desperately.

“Your sons shalt be kings!” they replied. Then the biggest witch stared straight at me, her eyes bored into my skull.

“I hear something coming!” she screamed. Quickly, they swooped away, leaving nothing but a cloud of smoke wafting in the air.

I glanced at Macbeth. His eyes were glazed over, as if deep in evil thoughts. When he saw me looking, he straightened up.

“As if that was true!” he exclaimed, laughing nervously.

Suddenly we heard horse’s hooves. A horse was cantering towards us, with a messenger on board. He stopped beside Macbeth, and declared,

“You shalt be Thane of Cawdor!”

Lady Macbeth’s final letter – Daisy

In literacy this week we have been looking carefully at the story of Macbeth. We have spent a great deal of time analysing who was responsible for King Duncan’s murder and most of the children thought that Lady Macbeth bore the greater blame. We decided to write final letters from her to Macbeth before she took her own life. We were trying to achieve a clear structure, to make the reader feel sorry for her and to try and tell the story through the letter. Here’s Daisy’s letter:

                                                     Dunsinane Castle

Dear loving husband,

I am writing to you to give you a very important apology. I feel that life means nothing to me anymore and that you’d be better off without me. I am ever so sorry about the situation you are in; it is all my fault.

I should have never persuaded you to murder the king, but when you wrote to me about your meeting with the weird sisters I felt so overcome by a lust power I couldn’t stop myself. Please forgive me, as I cannot take on any more guilt.

Back then, I thought you were a cowardly person, but now I see you are a very brave man. You are trying so hard in the situation that I am responsible for. I am responsible for the death of Banqou, Macduff’s wife and all Macduff’s beloved children. I feel as if I am responsible for all the murders on the planet. I can still see King Duncan’s scarlet blood dripping off my hands, no matter how much I scrub at them.

I really want your forgiveness, as I am ever so sorry. I am so sad for you, but I felt that you would want to murder me if I didn’t apologise, so here it is in black and white. Saying goodbye to the world will hopefully make you feel better.

From your ever-loving wife,

Lady Macbeth

Lady Macbeth xxx

Persuasive letters relating to The School We’d Like – Daisy

                                                                                        Monday 9th September

Dear Mr Burford,

I am writing to outline my group’s idea of a computer room in the middle classroom.

I think that a computer room is quite a good idea as the children can get more support from teachers as they will be in the same room instead of walking up and down. I (and I am sure many others feel the same way) find it annoying when I am stuck and have to go and find a teacher or having to put my hand up until they walk by.

We were thinking about placing a couple of tables in the middle of the room. Therefore the mini laptops can be put there and maybe breakfast club could still carry on if there is enough space. It will be easier to talk to friends but this will not be the case as teachers will spot this easily. The worst problems that we thought of were Wii fit, Breakfast club and Chess club. If they couldn’t find another place they wouldn’t be able to carry on. Breakfast club can still carry on (if not they can move into the hall), but Chess club will have to move somewhere like the Conference room. Wii fit will still be able to carry on if we don’t put the computers in front of the whiteboard or projector screen.

To conclude, I think this idea will benefit all the teachers, children, and other people like the governors and parents. Children won’t be as naughty in I.C.T lessons as teachers will see them talking. I also hope that you will take the idea into mind, as only a fool would turn down this amazing idea. I hope you like my letter and idea as much as I do.

Yours sincerely,

 

Daisy M